Elemental loss (Senryu)

Swirling turmoil
Life as I know it is gone
Elemental loss

A friend Memoirsofadragon, took a poetry workshop and had to write a poem in TWO minutes on the following topic:

When the air is unbreathable

And the water is undrinkable

And the land is intolerable, I will:

I decided that my life this week wasn’t stressful enough (LOL) and I should try this challenge. So I grabbed a timer, set my shoulders, and pressed the start button.
True to form, my philosophy of life kicked right in: When in doubt, FREAK OUT. Wow, I was stressed. Nothing. My head screamed “I’m in turmoil”!

A-ha. When in doubt, turn to haiku!
I am in turmoil

Now what? My head said, gracious, life as I know it is gone.

Life as I know it is gone.

Then, nothing. Utter silence. The seconds ticked by. And finally, the following summery gracefully appeared in front of my eyes:

Elemental loss

Five seconds left and I switched the first line to “swirling” and viola!  I am pretty happy with the results, it is raw and real and anguished.  Something I would definitely feel if my world had just ended.  And it mirrors my life right now, so I have a real connection to it.

9 thoughts on “Elemental loss (Senryu)

  1. Pingback: Elemental Loss Haiku | RePrEsSeD ExPrEsSiOnS

  2. The poems I did today I wrote in two minutes the both of them together. I sat down and they were just there. I’d read the challenge on Memoirs maybe I unconsciously participated lol That you did a haiku is really impressive those take me time the syllables


    1. I have written poems before in a few minutes, but it is only when I have a bug up my bootie or the “spirit moves” or I have a strong emotion. To write with no inclination, well, not something that ……flows! Im surprised that everyone had something written! You were with a talented group indeed, including yourself of course! 🙂


  3. I have never tried a two minute poem. I doubt I’d be successful! Especially, not with the finesse in which you wrote your Haiku or Memoirs of a Dragon wrote his!


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